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August 18, 2012
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How can it be
so hard to see
things you call nit picky
Add up inside painfully
I wish you would just understand
All that it takes is holding my hand
Showing you miss me would be nice
A simple kiss on the lips would suffice
I need affection I thought I was clear
Didn't I tell you didn't you hear?
I apologize it must be my fault
That's why I locked my heart in a vault
I gave you the key, the only one I had
And I explained to you what I had planned
you must have forgotten how important it is
for all the little thing to add up to bliss
Have I lost you where and how did you go
I thought you loved me, was I wrong do you know?
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How I was feeling that day
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~NotenSMSK Sep 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I liked this work due to the expressions and the plea sort of look that I am able to find in it. There is sadness in the work which, I do feel can be improved by using proper punctuation marks since there is a bit of awkwardness at times when the reader is unable to realize what the author wanted to imply. Other than that this is a a really good work with a lot of emotions and sweet yet sad ideas.
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